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来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/06/25 05:50:14
A nightmare about mouse
I dreamed a mouse stole my cell-phone and ran away that night,I chased that mouse furiously and dug out its hole,after while,I seized back my phone and hit the mouse to death with my hand.
I got up with perspiration in the second morning,I thougt that's strange for which I can make a dream about mouse for no particular reason,whereupon
I started my computer to open the website of Baidu,and then I wrote about the story in my dream on it for helping me to interpret the dream.Suddenly,
The sound box came out a very loud voice of drum and sung it like this:"Forget the phone was stole by me,forget you were laughed by me",which made me felt spooky.But i didn't know which program was running on my computer,i have toquit all of application program,but it was still singing.
Finally,I powered off the sound box.......

after while,应改为 after a while 表示 一会儿
I got up with perspiration in the second morning,这里有点问题,应该根本没有提到第一个早上,何来第二个呢?而且就算是用了,也应该是on the second morning,注意介词哦!
thougt 改为 thought
I thougt that's strange for which I can make a dream about mouse for no particular reason
这句话有问题,thougt 改为 thought,看样子是定语从句,可是现行词究竟是什么呢?建议将which去掉,因为for就有“因为”的意思,再在其前面加个逗号。
toquit 应开写 to quit

总体不错,以上的个别地方需要注意!继续努力!

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